Link to showcased essay (first draft):https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Ezl6Qs0A-kLSGqCGNVafy-BVK4cWMA37N_RCS7V8pyw/edit

Link to showcased essay (final draft):https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bGom4Jtb5DJZ-nYsheUIFeAGES4kTYWDssO2lPeBkfo/edit

Globally, from my first draft to my final draft, I added a whole new paragraph because I felt as if I needed to further explain my thesis. I could not prove my thesis unless I added more textual evidence from the authors explored, as well as analysis and my own views to support the thesis. We were instructed to write the essay as if it were a conversation as opposed to a formal, completely academic essay that I would have been more used to in high school. I felt as if I built a conversation between myself and the sources, but there was more to say about the topic, which, partially, is the reason why I added a paragraph to my rough draft. Another global change I made to this essay was the addition of evidence that my classmate suggested to me from another author. This helped a lot because I was given evidence that I may have otherwise overlooked to make my essay an even stronger piece of work. If my classmate did not suggest this global change, I probably would not have picked up on it and missed out on a great piece of textual evidence to discuss throughout my essay to build ideas off of. Local changes made to the essay include changing sentence structure in order to improve overall essay clarity to the reader. A few of my sentences were awkward and wordy, so I went back and changed them to be more concise, as well as more naturally flowing.

In terms of my development, every essay I have written I have employed the strategies that I employed to write this essay. It has been helpful to employ these skills because it turned me into a more careful writer. It has helped me to realize the benefits of revision, as I am doubtful that I would have performed as well as I did without revising my paper at all. I may not have added that extra paragraph or that piece of evidence that strengthened my paper from Sanderson had I not gone back and read through my paper multiple times, debating with myself what needed to be fixed.