As I received my grade and feedback for my happiness essay from the professor, I noticed that most of the comments were based on grammar, as well as mechanical errors. I also noticed a few comments referring to further developing my ideas in a deeper manner. I feel like I get my initial point across, but could definitely elaborate more on my ideas, as well as expand. Not only should I elaborate on the ideas I make but the explanation of the quotations from the authors. I can explain the ideas as well as tie them together better in order to bring flow to all of my ideas. Finally, it would be helpful for me to relate my ideas back to other aspects of my thesis in a more clear, complete manner.